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Old 02-23-2007, 05:57 PM
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Default Mastronet, I may be wrong here but let's here opinions??

Posted By: barrysloate

Doug- I've always felt that the prose style in your catalog is clumsy and much too busy. In most cases, many of the sentences are convoluted and difficult to understand. I taught college English for three years. If you handed in a paper written that way, you would be staying after school cleaning blackboard erasers. Ever thought about streamlining that writing style a little? Most lots don't need dozens of adjectives, especially when half the time they are not even used properly.

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